Manufactured in Atlantis

(C) Ady. Flash Fiction For Aspiring Writers (FFFAW) May 5, 2015. This photo brings you to the challenge page. Hosted by Priceless Joy
(C) Ady. Flash Fiction For Aspiring Writers (FFFAW) May 5, 2015. This photo brings you to the challenge page. Hosted by Priceless Joy

There was nothing but ocean as far as the eye can see. Stomachs were beginning to rumble.

Meanwhile, several miles below the sea, a great king with a great beard was having a feast. Then a guard ran in, announcing, “Sir, there are four humans above us.”

The great king, with trident in hand, stood up. “Who are they?” He demanded to know.

“They seem shipwrecked, sir. They’re in a tiny rowboat.”

“Let’s show them a good time, shall we?” A cheeky grin spread across the great king’s face.

~

Later that night, four humans found themselves on the shoreside but they had the wildest dreams about talking fishes and partying with dolphins, as well as a seaweed crown adorning their heads. As they examined it, they discovered a label. It said: “Made in Atlantis.”


Word count: 155

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Manufactured in Atlantis

15 thoughts on “Manufactured in Atlantis

  1. I was wary of what they would do to the humans; glad the story ended on a light note. 😀 It was refreshing and fun. And now I was a seaweed crown crafted just for me lol.

    As a side note, to strengthen your writing even more, combine a character’s action tags with his dialogue. Examples:

    A guard ran in. “Sir, there are four humans above us.”
    The great king, with his trident in hand, stood up. “Who are they?”
    A cheeky grin spread across the great king’s face. “Let’s show them a good time, shall we?”

    😀 Thanks for the entertaining read!

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    1. Thanks for the tips, izzy, if I may I call you izzy? I do admit I’m poor at combining the dialogues with the actions. I need some help on that. More feedback is always welcome!
      Hope you enjoyed your visit to my blog! 🙂

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      1. Lol, yes, please feel free to call me Izzy. 😀 We writers all have something that gets us, don’t we? But combining action and dialogue is technical/structural stuff; you have a real talent for characterization and description. I can hear, see, and feel your characters and everything that’s happening. (Just to be sure, I’m not just saying this to be nice).

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