The Young Watchmaker

(C) Alastair Forbes. Sundays Photo Fiction (SPF), Aug 23, 2015. This photo brings you to the challenge page. Hosted by Alastair Forbes.
– An Intricate Looking Wristwatch (C) Alastair Forbes. Sundays Photo Fiction (SPF), Aug 23, 2015. This photo brings you to the challenge page. Hosted by Alastair Forbes.

Everyone has to start somewhere

But he never knew it was so difficult.

Cogs, gears, springs and screws laid around him in a messy circle

and they were scattered all over the work desk.

Tunnel vision is his strongest suit anyway

And right now it was trained on the central gold-piece

A tong in a hand, a screwdriver in the other,

He stared with squinted eyes magnified a thousand fold

Fiddle, twiddle, a click and a snap,

His eyes widened

Was that it?

Was he done?

He attached the housing, screwed it shut,

inserted the battery, gave it life.

Tick Tick Tick, it was music to his ears.

Word count: 108

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The Young Watchmaker

12 thoughts on “The Young Watchmaker

  1. Nice idea to take something simple and give it an air of tension.

    Only crit I would have is the layout of the story. Some of the lines i.e. 3 and 4 were clearly one sentence, but for me, you lose the flow when changing lines for no real reason.

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    1. Thanks, paulmclem!! I thought I was going to write a poem, so I kept to the free verse structure! But now I know it’s not poetic after all hahaha!! Thanks again for your comment!

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  2. “I can take apart the remote control, and I can almost put it back together.” Afraid I’d make a well-oiled boat anchor, instead of a working watch. So good job, youngster!

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  3. I think that would be a difficult job. I have a brother who can take apart anything and put it back together. But working with such small intricate pieces is amazing. I like how you made it a poem and you anticipated the next line as you read it.

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